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Wednesday, October 26, 2005

Thoughts, comments.... Part 2

Howdy this is part two of the story I've been working on... If you are interested and didn't read part one... It can be found here.

Hope you like it, the story sort of starts picking up here.

Otter

4 Comments:

Blogger ZooooM said...

I like this. Your Gizz character is WONDERFUL. There are so many clever little lines in this entry.

Oh, and I've also heard the History channel as "Hitler, Jesus, Hitler, Jesus Channel". he he.

The line about getting grades in school was good.

The flaming pee and fire in one's pants is always something that makes me giggle.

The dead body was a nice new "woah" in the midst of figuring out the first "woah".

3:43 PM  
Anonymous The Hero of Canton said...

Really good. I love the seamless intergration of real life events into the story. I long to find out what has happened. And I agree with Zoooom in the dead body addition. Although I feel the character should have displayed more dramatic reatction to it's discovery dispite his already disturbing morning. After all it is a dead human. Think something along the lines of Buffy's reaction to the Deputy Mayor's murder in "Bad Girl's" (Buffy Season 3 episodes 14&15)

3:31 AM  
Blogger The Management said...

Thanks for the feedback... I'm glad you like Gizz... Though it's Tim's story, Gizz and Autumn (not introduced yet) are the "heros".

I think these first two sections are the most unwieldy 'cause they are almost all just Tim. If you made it through this... well I'm pretty happy.

Hero... I know what you mean about the lack of reaction, I thought a lot about that... In the next section you see Tim more or less become unglued, the body is the big reason for that. Gizz is calm because this is less a person to him and more just a problem.

Anyway... That was about half of what I have finished... If you really do find it amusing I might write some more... I have the story pretty much plotted out... I just write slow..

Thanks again for the comments... I really do appreciate it.

Otter

2:09 PM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Would the Gizz hang out with Bono?
---ASK

9:02 PM  

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